vil give mig lidt feedback?

hey tøser..

jeg mangler lidt feedback på de digte jeg skriver så mange af..

så nu vil jeg ligge et enkelt herind og se om i vil give lidt feedback på selve det skriftlige.. også gerne på indholdet, men husk på jeg oftes skriver om min fortid.. så det er ikke sådan jeg er nu..

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In the middle of the night
You don’t love me; you don’t even care for me, do you?
I yelled and caused a scene
I did everything my precious mother didn’t teach
My head was exploding and all I felt was lonely

Spinning in my thoughts was hurtful
You don’t want me nor do you need me
I turned around watching my anger resolve itself
I relived every piece of what once was my living hell
I felt the burning flames lick every inch of my body
In the mess I made I suddenly felt sexual

Deep inside my pain I felt the need to control myself
All I really needed could be fixed within a single sec
I craved to cut myself, so I did
I looked from outside my body
While watching the blood drip from my wrist
I flew down towards me wanting nothing more than simple regret

The most simple thing; I needed to forgive myself
Yet no such thing is simple
How could I ever forgive myself for what I did I shall burn in hell
I was begging for her to understand
That my spirit and soul is beyond repair

From the first breath till I started to cut and abuse myself
I became unavailable
Unable to be loved, mostly by myself
And that will forever stay part of me and the world that I call, my hell